Star Cats

[Mechadon]

Prologue: After Area 6

Master General Gavial starred blankly out the window of his command cabin. The view outside was pure empty darkness; a perfect representation of his soul. Early into his depression, he handed over all his responsibilities to the lesser admirals in the fleet, locked himself in his cabin, and requested never to be disturbed: ever. For days, he sat behind his desk replaying the fateful events that had occurred three weeks prior; both in his mind and from actual recordings from the Area 6 orbital defense zone.  Suddenly, the blackness outside swirled like a kaleidoscope with pin-point lights. A star field had materialized right in front of his eyes; the fleet had entered normal space again.

Gavial pulled open the front drawer in his desk; it was filled with empty whisky bottles. He blindly fished around with his hand until he found a full one. He broke the seal and poured himself another glass. Then he hoisted himself out of his command chair, moved over to the view-window with his drink, and leaned against the glass. The General’s eyes somberly traced lines between the stars, trying to see any recognizable pattern. To Gavial, it looked as thought the other admirals had finally figured out the futility of the situation. Their fleet had entered an uncharted area of the galaxy many days ago in a desperate attempt to evade pursuing Cornerian fleets. With no beacons to guide them, they would be lucky to find their way back to any familiar part of space. Even if they could find a way back, it would be suicidal to return to the Lylat System. The Venomian fleet simply had nowhere to go. The Master General knew there would be no use for the fleet to be wandering aimlessly through the void. He was at least glad that the rest of the fleet had gained some sense, and had come to the same conclusions as he had. Now, the best option was to conserve their power by shutting down the engines completely. This should buy them an extra five months for their life support systems. Subtracting from that, the fleet only had enough food supplies for another four months. After that the only options would be to starve to death or resort to cannibalism. Gavial pressed himself off the glass and moved toward a large painting on the wall to his left. The painting was a large mural depicting the full figure of the Venomian Emperor. The image was painted before Andross had altered himself with his own twisted biological experiments. The scientist in the painting stood with pride, wearing a white lab coat. This mural was erected in all command cabins in the Venomian fleet in order to remind all the admirals to whose cause they were fighting for. Gavial gazed up at his Emperor while tears welled up in his eyes, “Forgive me Andross. I have failed you terribly.”
He couldn’t help but reiterate the events at Area 6 a final time. He closed his eyes.

His ship was back in orbit above Venom. He had sent Caiman out with a squad of fighter-ships to inspect the forward lines of their defense zone. That’s when they showed up. In a matter of minutes the Star Fox team punched through every line of his defense fleet with the aid of their Great Fox command ship, including the Super Weapon they had deployed for such a situation. At the time, Gavial thought the best plan would be to regroup the surviving ships with those from the other defense zones. It was during this change in the formations when the entire Cornerian Fleet arrived. The ensuing battle cost them half of the Venomian armada. That’s when The Master General led the survivors out of the Lylat System in hopes of making a comeback, but, in doing so, the Cornerians gained an unforeseen defensive advantage and forced the Venomian armada to linger outside of the system in a permanent stalemate. For the next days the Cornerians successfully eliminated more of his fleet with multiple hit-and-run attacks on the armada. That’s when Master General Gavial decided that remaining outside of the star system was no longer an option.

The Master General opened his eyes again. He could no longer stand the crushing shame within him and he had no desire to see the rest of the Venomian armada deteriorate before him. He moved back to his desk, pulled a laser pistol out of the top drawer, charged the gun to full power and pushed the barrel into his mouth. At that moment, a knocking sounded at his door. “Sir, I know you are in there. I urge you to open this door this instant!” It was Caiman. Darn it, he knows the override code. Sure enough, the door slid open and in stepped the short reptilian serviceman, “Sir! No! You take that gun out of your mouth right now!” Caiman gazed desperately into the Master General’s eyes, “Please Sir, there is still hope.” Gavial took the gun out of his mouth, “What do you mean hope?” “Master General that is what I am here to report,” Caiman responded as a matter of fact, “We were passing by this star system when our sensors detected that one of the planets is inhabited.” Now the General was confused, “Star system?” He moved back to the view-window. It was then that he realized that one of the stars was a little brighter than the rest. “We sent our scout ship further in to examine the planet. Sir, they are completely defenseless; they have no star fleets of their own.” General Gavial turned back to Caiman, “Do you honestly think our fleet is capable of forcing this planet into submission?” A look of definite uncertainty came across Caiman’s face, “Well, no Sir. But I have persuaded the other admirals we can take their planet politically.” The General was taken aback by this, “Do I look like a politician to you?” Caiman chuckled, “No Sir, but you don’t need to be. I have this all figured out.” He pulled out portable data tablet, “I had requested that the scout ships determine the most ideal region to deal with diplomatically. They came up with this one.” On the tablet appeared a top down digital photo of a coastal city, “This is Little Tokyo. Their government is much less democratic than other nations on the planet. I am certain we can persuade them to provide us with hospitalities and help us build a new Venomian Army.” The General paused to take in all this new information and think it through, “What are the other admirals’ opinions on this?” “Oh, they are all for it Sir,” he said reassuringly, “We just need your permission to proceed.” Gavial paused much longer this time. “Very well, you have my permission,” before Caiman could speak he asked, “This was your idea was it not?” Caiman smiled, “Yes Sir. That is true.” “Then I’m appointing you to this task,” General Gavial added. Caiman was astonished, “Sir. I am merely a Squad Captain.” “Not anymore,” The General continued, “I am promoting you to Vice Admiral. You will continue to develop a more detailed political campaign with the other admirals and you will act as the official ambassador for Venom.” The General could now see much pride in Caiman’s expression, “This is a great honor Sir. Thank You.” He saluted the Master General and ran for the door but then stopped and turned around again, “Sir, I will not fail you. Our fleet will grow in strength and we will take Lylat back from the Cornerians. For the glory of Andross.” The Master General stopped him, “No Caiman. Andross is dead. This glory will be our own.” When Caiman left the command cabin, Master General Gavial turned back to the mural, pointed his laser pistol at the painting, and fired a round into the image of Andross’s head. He tossed the gun onto his desk and, for the first time in a week, stepped out of his command cabin.

[AsterCrow]

I hope for Caiman's sake the Captain had a bathroom in his cabin.

[Mechadon]

I hope for Caiman's sake the Captain had a bathroom in his cabin.

Think of his command cabin as a luxery apartment. He's got his own fridge and of course a bathroom.

[Takila]

I enjoyed reading the prologue,  particularly when it ties into Little Tokyo.  Your witting style reminds me of Terry Brook's in a way.

Constructive criticism, if you want it; Your story felt rushed, and could have flowed out in about two to three times the space.  A few structure problems, mostly involving quotes.  I look forward to reading your next installment (should you choose to write one).

[Mechadon]

I enjoyed reading the prologue,  particularly when it ties into Little Tokyo.  Your witting style reminds me of Terry Brook's in a way.

Constructive criticism, if you want it; Your story felt rushed, and could have flowed out in about two to three times the space.  A few structure problems, mostly involving quotes.  I look forward to reading your next installment (should you choose to write one).

Really? You think I rushed it? Yah, I admit it got quick at the end. But that's because I thought I was going too slow at first and it would be boring. Now I know I can go at the pace that seems natural to me. Thanks a lot for the criticism.

For those of you waiting for space battles, you're going to have to wait. There's a whole lot of story to be told before I launch the cats into orbit.

[Blackcat]

Not my thing, I’m more into parodies like Commander Kitty, but your writing is good, done I read it, now stop bugging me in MSN!.

^_-

[BurkeWorld]

now stop bugging me in MSN!.

I tell that to Mech everyday.

~Leo

[Mechadon]

The subject of my old SPC/Star Fox fanfic has come up. Some of you might remember it. Since there is no chance in hell of me writing out the whole thing, I thought I’d share all the major plot points that have existed in my head for years.

Read the Prologue First. http://mechadon.deviantart.com/art/Star-Cats-52097391

Little Tokyo welcomes the Venomians into their city as refugees. They celebrate the union of their leadership with the building of a new Venomian Academy. Citizens are encouraged to help build it. While most of the cast we know and love go to the ground-laying all night celebration. Carla and Bucky stay behind at her restaurant (not being too fond of their new guests). Three rowdy Venomians come into the restaurant wanting to be served. They start picking on Carla which causes Bucky to have a violent fight with them. The morning after one of the Venomians is found dead supposedly having succumbed to a blow to the head. Princess Violet sees this as murder based on prejudice, and sends both Carla and Bucky to Prisoner Island (which Venom has re-established as a real prison colony instead of a luxury resort).

Francine and Bad Bird obviously have a problem with this and are starting to see the light. Meanwhile the Pizza Cats quit the restaurant to sign up to the Academy wanting to join their new army. Leaving Fran without employees.

Bad Bird sneaks into the infirmary of a government building to find the body of the dead Venomian that Bucky supposedly killed. He does tests and finds remnants of an anti-coagulant in the blood. Which means the Venom folk injected their own so that he would bleed out into his brain.

Now knowing it's a set up, Bad Bird tells Francine the truth and takes her with him into hiding. Bad Bird reunites with a band of close ninja crow officers to start a resistance against Venom. He also unveils a secret bunker containing their main form of transport: the Sky Crow. It's a stealth modified 747 fitted with VTOL rockets for quick take-offs. Their first destination is an assault on Prisoner Island to rescue Carla and Bucky and anyone else willing to form a resistance against Venom. (Helios must be rolling his eyes now)  The rescued prisoners move with Bucky and Francine  (and I-Beam)  to a secret location to establish a base of operations within a small archipelago ...somewhere. >_> (didn't think of that detail)

Meanwhile, Bad Bird, Carla and the Ninja Crows, take the Sky Crow to Saudi Arabia. Why? The Sky Crow actually used to belong to an old villainous friend of Bad Bird, Sayeed, who is the leader of Hamster militants who are former Mujahideen from the old Soviet conflict. (I learned that Hamsters originated from the deserts of the middle east from watching Hamtaro) Sayeed owns a large tunnel network under the Rub' al Khali desert. They agree to join the fight against Venom. They also reveal that they shot down a Venomian aircraft. The pilot wouldn’t talk about anything during an interrogation. His last dying words contained the name Andross. This is the first time the name of the old Emperor is mentioned to anyone.

That’s all I’ve figured out consistently for Bad Bird’s side of the story.

The Cat’s continue their training as soldiers and pilots for Venom. Eventually, word gets out of an approaching Cornerian scouting fleet led by Bulldog unit (Bill). The Cats suggest using the Catatonic to defend. The Big Supreme refuses to function for the cats, knowing that Venom is evil. After removing a bunch of ancient tech, they’re able to regain control of it. The Cats in the Catatonic move out with a small fleet to intercept Bulldog unit. This is the story’s first space battle. It’s over fairly quickly as The Catatonic completely destroys and kills Bill’s fighter unit.

Let’s see here. Violet eventually receives her own space fleet. Bad Bird’s Earthbreed resistance also develops a fleet. The Sky Crow is refitted to travel amongst the stars and is re-dubbed…

Wait for it.

Wait for it.

The Aster Crow.

That’s all I got.

That’s why I’ve never continued with the story, cause I really don’t know where it could possibly go or how it can end.

[Romero Anchovy]

Wow I think it's pretty well thought out. The bad guy becomes the good guy and the good guys become the bad guys...epic

[sans soul]

the aster crow ^_~

go ahead, take advantage of my name, you know it's awesome.

and the perfect fit. *grin*

[Mechadon]

I'll let you guys in on something.

The Sky Crow is a direct rip-off of a gunship called the Halicarnassus that is owned by the heroes in the novel "Seven Ancient Wonders" (or Seven DEADLY Wonders, if you live in NA  )

It's written by Matthew Reilly, an action-adventure (and Australian) novelist who both Helios and I enjoy reading. The plot point of going to Prisoner Island is also taken from the same book, where the heroes need to extract someone from Guantanamo Bay (which is soon to be closed down, yay!!!). I'm currently reading the sequel "Six Sacred Stones". AND I have learned of the next sequel "The Five Greatest Warriors". So exciting.

I've reveaedl much, but don't worry Helios, the secret of the Capstone stays between us. 

[Blackcat]

If you dont know what to do, doing a a SPC vs Star Fox crossover, all based up in misunderstanding. The old "Im not the bad guy, You are the bad guy!" would work fine I guess.

Fox McCloud ship (The Arwing) crasses in the middle of Little Tokyo, everyone thinks is an alien atack, can you guess the rest?

[Mechadon]

If you dont know what to do, doing a a SPC vs Star Fox crossover, all based up in misunderstanding. The old "Im not the bad guy, You are the bad guy!" would work fine I guess.

Fox McCloud ship (The Arwing) crasses in the middle of Little Tokyo, everyone thinks is an alien atack, can you guess the rest?

A retarded sequel to Dinosaur Planet *ahem* I mean Star Fox Adventures set in Little Tokyo?

Can you imagine if that game never existed?  It would be as if millions of Furry voices suddenly cried out in terror, and were suddenly silenced.

[KyoZaber]

If you dont know what to do, doing a a SPC vs Star Fox crossover, all based up in misunderstanding. The old "Im not the bad guy, You are the bad guy!" would work fine I guess.

Fox McCloud ship (The Arwing) crasses in the middle of Little Tokyo, everyone thinks is an alien atack, can you guess the rest?

A retarded sequel to Dinosaur Planet *ahem* I mean Star Fox Adventures set in Little Tokyo?

Can you imagine if that game never existed?  It would be as if millions of Furry voices suddenly cried out in terror, and were suddenly silenced.

Oh come on dude. While I agree vehemently that Star Fox Adventures is a major stinker, the character Krystal isn't that bad of an inclusion to the Star Fox series.
Was she needed? No. However, with her mysterious past, psychic powers, and other character traits, much could've been (and still could be) done.
Alas... This really isn't the thread though for arguing such stuff.

As for your story. I haven't read the Prologue, however I have read through where you were hoping to take your story, and I've got to say it doesn't look too bad so far. There are a few spots here and there that I personally would change myself. Since the Supreme Catatonic is such an epic bot, I'd make it pretty well impossible to control against it's will. Or at least, make it so that it'd operate very sluggishly at half the combat power if it were being forced to do anything.

It all amounts to though the type of story you want to write. 


In any case... Why not just write it a little bit at a time? It's not like you have to have this done by tomorrow. A little bit here, a little nudge there. At the very least, you'd have a story to share with your children if it took you that long to complete. 

[Blackcat]

If you dont know what to do, doing a a SPC vs Star Fox crossover, all based up in misunderstanding. The old "Im not the bad guy, You are the bad guy!" would work fine I guess.

Fox McCloud ship (The Arwing) crasses in the middle of Little Tokyo, everyone thinks is an alien atack, can you guess the rest?

A retarded sequel to Dinosaur Planet *ahem* I mean Star Fox Adventures set in Little Tokyo?

No, just the usual "Guy stuck in alien planet" plot that has been used even before I was born... And when it comes to Star Fox, I only like the Snes one and the Nintendo 64 one.

[KyoZaber]

If you dont know what to do, doing a a SPC vs Star Fox crossover, all based up in misunderstanding. The old "Im not the bad guy, You are the bad guy!" would work fine I guess.

Fox McCloud ship (The Arwing) crasses in the middle of Little Tokyo, everyone thinks is an alien atack, can you guess the rest?

A retarded sequel to Dinosaur Planet *ahem* I mean Star Fox Adventures set in Little Tokyo?

No, just the usual "Guy stuck in alien planet" plot that has been used even before I was born... And when it comes to Star Fox, I only like the Snes one and the Nintendo 64 one.

This is just my personal opinion, however just because a main plot point has been used by someone else doesn't mean that something new can be done with it. ... It does mean though that more tact & creativity has to be used when generating the rest of the storyline.

[Blackcat]

Well Fox Mcloud is a great character and that "Krystal" broke up with him. So you dont really need to include her in a fanfic anymore.

There are a lot of ways to make a good SPC/Star Fox crossover, but for some reason, I like the "malfunctioning experimental Warp drive" or the "Dont touch that alien object" plots.